On a good looking sunny day Lucy’s family went to the zoo. “ Get up, get up” grumbled Lucy’s parents.
When Lucy, Jake, Chelsea, Thomas and their parents were all ready they zoomed off to the zoo. When it was 8:30 they were at the zoo. They got their six tickets and went to go have a ride on an zoo van with other people. They got to see the tigers. “ Wow look at that tiger”. Shouted Jake. He had shouted really loudly because it had been on the top of the roof of the zoo van. “ I am so scared” Chelsea whispered to her. Then she said to lucy “ We will be ok”. Jake, Thomas and their father weren't scared. They thought that it was cool seeing a tiger on top of a zoo van. “ It’s ok they usually do that”. Said the lady who drove them to the tigers area. After that Chelsea wanted to go to the toilet. She asked the lady if she could go to to toilet. “ Ok, wait a minute”. She then called some men that worked for the zoo. They came in a van to. They also came with some meat so the tiger will get off the roof. They were all happy because they got to have lunch
Great Annalise, I really like your choices of language you used instead of the word 'said'. Next time try and use paragraphing in your writing too.
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